Brilliant+Beginnings


 * Students were given a boring beginning and asked to revise it using dialouge, action, characters thoughts or a sound. Check out some of their new improved versions. Which story beginning would capture your interest and make you want to continue reading?**
 * = // BORING BEGINNING: This is a story about the time I took a wild roller coaster ride. // ||


 * BRILLIANT BEGINNING 1 (by Travis)**

"Ahhhh! Stop this ride!" I screamed. "We must beeeeeeee going at least 100 miles per hour. Do I still have my eyeballs?" I sputtered as the spinning finally stopped.

"This is the merry-go-round," sighed my friend John. "The roller coaster is next!"


 * BRILLIANT BEGINNING 2 (by Keegan)**

"Ahhhhh!" That ride was awesome. Do you want to go on it again?" Matt said as he stumbled dizzily.

"Let's go on the Hurlawhirl," I suggested. "It's the biggest roller coaster in Canada."

I almost threw up on the merry-go-round. How am I going to ride the Hurlawhirl without losing my lunch?" Matt asked.

"Come on, let's go," I yelled as I race to the giant coaster.


 * BRILLIANT BEGINNINGS 3 (by Keaton)**

"Weeee!" shouted Alaina as they went over the loop-de-loop. Everyone was screaming as loud as they could. The coaster took one sharp turn and then another. Ahead, there was a straight drop. The screaming got even louder as the cars approached the edge.