Extended+Endings


 * Students read an abrupt and boring story ending and revised it by adding a memory, a feeling, a hope or wish, a decision or a defining action. The story was about getting lost in the woods. We're sure you'll agree that the revised versions make for a more satisfying finish. Leave your comments by clicking on the discussion tab!**


 * ABRUPT ENDING: Once I found my way out, I went home and went to bed. ||

by Mia

"Wow. Look at me Todd. I'm in a big tree." ... That was the last thing I said to him before I got lost in the dark, creepy forest.

"Tim, that's not the last thing you said to me," replied Todd. "Stop trying to make the story sound sad."

"Fine."... I walked through the old forest. Todd said we should go back but no! Stupid me. I said no. I wish I had said yes. That's when I got lost. When I couIdn't find Todd, I walked farther down the path and came to a little house. Well, not really a house. More like a cottage or maybe a treehouse.

"Move on with the story already," groaned Todd. "Sheesh!"

"Fine. Man let me have some fun, will ya?"... I walked up to the door and knocked three times. Then an ugly old witch came out and started chasing me.

"Jim, stop it! That is so NOT true."

"Okay, fine." ....I opened the door and that's when I saw a purple glowing globe. I walked up and touched it. Next thing you know I was back in my room. I might have been dreaming but I really, utterly do NOT think I was.

"Sheesh!"

by Travis

All through the night I couldn't sleep because I was thinking the word, "Lost." Home ran through my heart as the ants and spiders crawled on me.

In my mind I could hear my mom saying, "Good morning, Jack. Get up." Then I heard a helicopter. I thought it was my mind trying to play tricks on me but it was some forest rangers. I started waving my coat in the air.

They brought me home. We had a big dinner and then I settled into my memory foam mattress. It was good to be home.